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This week I’ll be sharing my urban legends WIP. A serial killer murders college students, one by one, based off famous urban legends.
Here’s my excerpt (I used creative punctuation to make the best use of my sentences):
…[Sweeney Todd] hoped no one would be lingering in the hallway because the stench would probably cause suspicion; if he was lucky, the person would faint from the disgusting smell.
He wanted to tiptoe down the hall, but the duffel bag was too heavy, causing his feet to drag on the tile floor. He was pretty sure his boots would scruff it all up; hopefully, the janitor would do his job of waxing the floor to hide any evidence in the morning.
What seemed like hours, Sweeney Todd finally made it to his destination. His heart started beating fast; if anyone came out of their room and recognized him, he’d be screwed. He hurriedly put his ear to the door and listened for any noises; he heard nothing.
He rushed to pull the spare key out of his pocket, unlocked the door, and went inside, leaving only a crack through the door, not wanting to risk the lights from the hallway waking up his next victim.
Once the door closed, he remained standing by it and dropped the duffel bag onto the carpet. He waited for his eyes to adjust to the dark, listening to the soft snores of his next victim.
Keep smiling,
Yawatta Hosby
I’m all for purposely creative punctuation.:-) Good snippet. I fear for Sweeney’s next victim!
Thanks, Priscilla. The next victim is asleep and he’s snuck into her room. Can you guess the next urban legend?
Keep smiling,
Yawatta
Oh no, I CAN guess, yikes!
LOL. I hope I didn’t spoil the rest of the snippets for you since there’s no mystery of what’s going on.
Keep smiling,
Yawatta
I really liked this snippet. More, please.
Thanks, Charmaine!
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Yawatta
He’s taken some big chances here. I wonder if that’s part of the thrill for him.
It definitely is, Ed.
Keep smiling,
Yawatta
He sure moves quick, from one victim to the next. I wonder if that will trip him up in the end.
Hey Jessica,
Actually he moves slowly and am very calculating. The earlier scenes with him and Savannah were from Chapter Two. The new scene is from Chapter Fifteen. I just wanted to give you guys closure to what happens to poor Savannah.
Keep smiling,
Yawatta
Vivid and full of details, as always!
Thanks Veronica!
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Yawatta
Intriguing, sounds like this next victim doesn’t even know what’s coming.
Hi, Cecilia. Yeah, you’re right. None of his victims get any fair warnings 🙂
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Yawatta
Another victim! Intense scene.
Thanks, Karen.
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Yawatta
Oh, no. Another victim?
Yes, ma’am 🙂
Keep smiling,
Yawatta