#8 Sunday Weekend Writing Warriors Excerpt #41

The Weekend Writing Warriors is an awesome site that allows writers to share their 8 to 10 sentence excerpts, published or unpublished, to the blogosphere. If you’d like to join or would like to read wonderful talent, please visit the WeWriWa website on Sunday, 3/22 http://wewriwa.blogspot.com.

This week I’ll be sharing my urban legends WIP. A serial killer murders college students, one by one, based off famous urban legends.

Here’s my excerpt:

Sweat started to drip from his forehead. Play it cool, he thought. Sweeney Todd wouldn’t be nervous in this situation. Sweeney Todd would embrace the challenge.

He studied the clerk’s eyes to figure out what he was thinking. “Hi, I just found out I’ll be spending longer in town. Can I book the same room for another two months?”

The clerk looked surprised, like why would someone in their right mind want to actually spend days, let alone months, in this dump. Clearing his throat, he said, “Of course, Mr. Todd, I’m happy that the accommodations work for you.” 

 “And can I make a special request?”

Keep smiling,

Yawatta Hosby

20 thoughts on “#8 Sunday Weekend Writing Warriors Excerpt #41

  1. “Sweat”? Ah, there’s a crack in the villain’s veneer. He IS vulnerable!

    I think there’s supposed to be a question mark after “in this dump” because earlier in the sentence it’s written “why would someone” instead of “why someone would.”

    Good snippet as always!

    • Thanks, Priscilla. I’ll change that punctuation mark. Nice catch that this villain is vulnerable. No one’s invincible, no matter what they think.

      Keep smiling,

  2. Oh, he’s covering his tracks. I guess he’ll be long gone before anyone steps foot in that room.

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